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Last week, I asked for feedback on a sales page, and several people gave me suggestions. A big thanks to all. I used the input to completely revamp the page. Now I'll see how it converts. It's great to be in a such a cooperative place.
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  • Profile picture of the author martin65
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  • Profile picture of the author gjabiz
    Originally Posted by andewags View Post

    Last week, I asked for feedback on a sales page, and several people gave me suggestions. A big thanks to all. I used the input to completely revamp the page. Now I'll see how it converts. It's great to be in a such a cooperative place.
    Ande,

    I THINK you will be pleased with your hard work and willingness to take critique. I, like most others, don't know with certainty what WILL work, until it is tested in the marketplace, but have a good feel for what won't work as well.

    Just a couple of small things, and you really don't need to do anything about them, just a personal preference. I'd prefer to see your subhead justified rather than centered, but, that is just my eye.

    I "feel" the headline works better if you take out "sit on your butt"...I get it, but the 60 days big promise is enough to convey the ease and simplicity. Again, minor detail.

    I love the pic and intro. It would be good to see a sub head below the pic, within a couple of paragraphs, that puts the focus back on the reader and what she is going to get from this.

    If you were to bring up the subhead, in blue, "I planned and wrote a novel in 60 days and YOU can too"...right below the picture, it will help control your reader's eye movement...and then you can give them the "story" of what you have and they can have too.

    Also, for eye movement, I'd probably put this paragraph:

    How do you put together a plot that hooks readers and keeps them turning pages? How do you make your characters seem real? How do you write description that's original and engaging? How do you write riveting dialogue? How do you weave together subplots? How do you know how much research to do? How do you craft a scene? How do you get yourself to write day after day? How do you sell the novel if you do manage to finish it?

    into bullet points. I like the BUY IT NOW at this point and so they will hit the button, check on price, and come back to read more to justify their buying decision (when you get some stats and analysis, you can see what your reader is doing).

    I think you did a great job of making your site more profitable, however, let's see what your market thinks, OK? You'll know pretty quickly.

    gjabiz

    PS. Again, my suggestions may be "minor" points, you have to be comfortable with what you are doing.
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  • Profile picture of the author Talkreal
    You've done a great job and should be pleased with the changes. If I were to suggest a refinement, it would be to create more white space between the text and the borders of your boxes. You can do this in CSS by adding padding.

    Trust me, the extra white space will make your boxed text easier to read.

    Good luck!
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