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Quckling improving copy?

by rlopes
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I know my copy isn't great, but instead of rewriting everything right now I'd just like to make it a bit better. Any suggestions?

Here it is:

Online Logo Maker
#copy #improving #quckling
  • Profile picture of the author urban renewal
    I'd focus more on a benefit.

    Like: "Create an eyeball-grabbing logo for your business so that you can make more money."

    Or something like that.

    Basically, why would someone want to have a good looking logo?
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  • Profile picture of the author verial
    1. FREE LOGO MAKER FREE LOGO CREATOR
    Aren't you saying the same thing twice? Is this for SEO purposes? Even so, Id go with a different headline if I were you (Think: Benefit!).

    2. The first few lines of your text seem to be repeating the fact that your website is offering a FREE LOGO CREATOR, which is already obvious from the get-go. Redundant, in other words.

    3. If the goal of your copy is to get people to use your FREE LOGO CREATOR, then why don't you make it easier to get to? Right now, it's a tiny text link at the bottom of your uninteresting text. It's easier to click on the BIG AD next to it, leaving your site.

    Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author BrianMcLeod
    Quit being such a lazy ass.

    You're whining about having to rewrite this much copy:

    Online Logo Maker was created with a single purpose:
    to bring a free professional logo design tool to everyone, focusing on usability and quality.
    Our logo creator is FREE, start creating your brand right now!
    Some of the features are:
    A lightweight, functional and clean interface;
    Hundreds of symbols of various categories to choose from;
    The right tools to rotate, resize and transform your logo;
    Logo ready fonts selected by professional designers;
    More than a hundred thousand logos developed by users worldwide!!!

    So what are you waiting for? Start online logo maker right now!
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      Originally Posted by BrianMcLeod View Post

      Quit being such a lazy ass.

      You're whining about having to rewrite this much copy:
      Possibly why people sit at the bottom of the food chain in the free world.

      Best,
      Ewen
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