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Forum: Copywriting 30th November 2015, 07:43 PM
Replies: 86
Views: 5,139
Posted By Andrew Gould
Re: Advice needed...

Asking for paragraphs from an "accomplished writer" is now trolling?

"The problem isn't that Johnny can't read. The problem isn't even that Johnny can't think. The problem is that Johnny doesn't...
Forum: Copywriting 13th November 2015, 02:05 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 794
Posted By MontelloMarketing
Forum: Copywriting 20th October 2015, 10:50 AM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,969
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Sales Letter Critique Pls.

If you have any brains in your skull, you'll internalize every word Rick said.
Forum: Copywriting 20th October 2015, 10:45 AM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,969
Posted By RickDuris
Re: Sales Letter Critique Pls.

I don't think you quite realize it, so I'll blurt it out:

The quality of your copy on that page is actually UNSELLING the product.

I'm not trying to be hurtful here. I'm trying to help.

You...
Forum: Copywriting 20th October 2015, 10:17 AM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,969
Posted By sethczerepak
Re: Sales Letter Critique Pls.

@Jessegilbert, you might not like this comment ^, but it's certainly how you come off. Asking for feedback means you ignore the stuff that's not helpful, you apply the stuff that is and you thank...
Forum: Copywriting 19th October 2015, 10:45 PM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,969
Posted By ChadHaynes
Re: Sales Letter Critique Pls.

If you want to write your own copy, read the classics and commit to learning.

That's all I can really say.

Your response was mostly defending yourself and your product. Like your letter, it was...
Forum: Copywriting 19th October 2015, 10:18 PM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,969
Posted By gjabiz
Just to be clear.

It could be the greatest software ever invented. I don't know.

What I know is this: You don't have a Mac version. My PC went into sh*t fits when I tried the exe. file. I won't do an exe. file...
Forum: Copywriting 9th October 2015, 11:05 AM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,778
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Constructive critique [UPDATED] [THIRD ATTEMPT]

You want acknowledgment of the fact that you're working hard to incorporate the ideas. Consider it acknowledged.

But like Tim said - the whole foundation is flawed. I'm not buyin' this house,...
Forum: Copywriting 9th October 2015, 05:57 AM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,778
Posted By zth91
Re: Constructive critique [UPDATED] [THIRD ATTEMPT]

Thank you all your replies guys, you're all right. I'm clearly looking at the wrong thing and not putting in enough research. Haha, no revision 4 Tim, back to studying the art and then doing some...
Forum: Copywriting 29th August 2015, 06:14 PM
Replies: 49
Views: 3,613
Posted By Andrew Gould
Re: Do you Use NLP/Hypnotic Writing in your Sales Copy/Ads?

That's a classic sales technique known as the alternative close.

What makes it NLP? And what is NLP? Or at least what is it as it relates to copy?
Forum: Copywriting 28th August 2015, 08:56 AM
Replies: 41
Views: 1,671
Posted By angiecolee
Re: copywriting competition

What exactly does your thesaurus software do that my (free) web-based version can't?

With a few extra key strokes, I've got 10 words looked up at the same time too. However, there's only so much...
Forum: Copywriting 28th August 2015, 04:35 AM
Replies: 41
Views: 1,671
Posted By marciayudkin
Re: copywriting competition

Wow, this is incredibly delusionary.

You cannot hammer away at objections and get someone to want something that they do not want!

You can only hammer away at objections and get people to want...
Forum: Copywriting 21st August 2015, 12:05 PM
Replies: 29
Views: 3,453
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: 450 Clicks, 0 Sales - What Gives? (and I think my funnel is pretty good)

Tim's right. There's no hook; no big idea... no golden thread.

And your sales letter will instantly turn people off - even if they through your entire funnel first.

You don't come across as any...
Forum: Copywriting 26th May 2015, 08:17 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 1,646
Posted By Jennifer Hutson
Re: Critique this landing page copy please

Although you asked for advice regarding your home page, Tim asks a valid question – and he's right about your grammar/voice issues.

What good does it do you to tighten up the home page if your...
Forum: Copywriting 26th May 2015, 03:16 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 1,646
Posted By cwright
Re: Critique this landing page copy please

He's only saying, if you don't provide anything more unique or compelling than what another already established site provides, then why would a visitor choose your site over theirs? Nobody here is...
Forum: Copywriting 23rd May 2015, 01:14 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 1,593
Posted By angiecolee
Re: here's my new squeeze page,i need your advice :)

I'm happy to help - it's super critical to UNDERSTAND the changes you're making, otherwise you're going to be on the never-ending hamster wheel of frustration, constantly wondering why what you're...
Forum: Copywriting 7th May 2015, 11:23 AM
Replies: 24
Views: 2,538
Posted By sethczerepak
Re: For The Copywriter Who Doesn't Settle For Being Average

I believe you're getting too focused on the verbage and the superficial techniques and that you missed the core principle in this swipe file.

It's not about making some ballsy, puffed up claim...
Forum: Copywriting 10th April 2015, 10:05 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 4,014
Posted By angiecolee
Re: [Need A Critique] Clothing Store Website Sales Letter

I'd love for you to try the exercise I suggested above. Show it to moms. Ask what they think. If it's what I suspect, you'll have your answer.

Frankly, you're going to learn more from THEM, being...
Forum: Copywriting 10th April 2015, 09:16 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,606
Posted By shawnlebrun
How to Increase Your Income as a Copywriter

Kick ass post by Craig Clemens... who is probably the one man who has
made more of a positive impact on my writing, copy quality, and copy business
more than any other person.

Over the last 14...
Forum: Copywriting 22nd February 2015, 08:16 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,148
Posted By pewpewpewmonkeys
Re: You Guys Understand Marketing Better... I'd Love Some Advice.

Wait, WHAT?!

PEOPLE BUY PRODUCTS THAT OFFER THEM RESULTS.

People don't buy fitness products for the journey of fitness.... they buy products to get the end results. In fact, the end results...
Forum: Copywriting 6th February 2015, 01:39 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,538
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Good Sales Copy Needed For Forex product launch!

This post is over 6 years old.

How about you up your post count on other threads until you can send them PMs yourself, rather than resurrecting long-dead threads?
Forum: Copywriting 21st January 2015, 09:38 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,414
Posted By angiecolee
Re: What do you think about these headlines for the graphic pack?

He wasn't asking you to justify the word choice. He was pointing out a more common interpretation of that phrase. I had the exact same reaction.

If it doesn't make sense, don't be afraid to cut...
Forum: Copywriting 30th December 2014, 10:32 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,549
Posted By RichBeck
Lightbulb Re: My sales page

Tim,

You nailed it.... That is why I chose not to opine.

All The Best,

Rich Beck
Forum: Copywriting 30th December 2014, 08:05 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,549
Posted By pewpewpewmonkeys
Re: My sales page

Or learn some valuable lessons.

How many of these threads about your sales page do you plan to make?
Forum: Copywriting 18th October 2014, 03:56 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 3,652
Posted By BrianMcLeod
Re: Chris Haddad - live from my house tonight...

Jump on the monthly notice list and you'll never miss another one. And don't worry - it's not a pitch list. We rarely mail more than a day or two leading up to each new live training.

Monthly Live...
Forum: Copywriting 18th October 2014, 09:56 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 2,736
Posted By Chriswrighto
Re: Best copywriting course/books?

Do some research man. It can't all be handed to you.

That list of books is the first place I went to learn the craft.

Let me assume you're brand spanking new to writing copy, I'll list the...
Forum: Copywriting 17th October 2014, 11:46 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 980
Posted By RickDuris
Re: Something sucks! Is it my copy? Layout? Offer???

No offense, but you clearly don't understand how guys make decisions to buy this kind of stuff.

Sorry, but it's a rewrite.

- Rick Duris

PS: "If you’re reading this, it means you’re...
Forum: Copywriting 17th October 2014, 11:27 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 980
Posted By Alexa Smith
Re: Something sucks! Is it my copy? Layout? Offer???

This.

Clearly and definitely, this.

I looked a while ago, and didn't post because I couldn't come up with the sort of tactful wording like that seen throughout Tim's post above, and I didn't...
Forum: Copywriting 16th October 2014, 12:49 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 2,736
Posted By drewfioravanti
Re: Best copywriting course/books?

You're mixing two totally different concepts as though they are one: Copywriting and article writing. Read this:...
Forum: Copywriting 2nd October 2014, 03:02 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,016
Posted By The Copy Nazi
I love Copywriting because I love lying

Jerry Seinfeld Gets Brutally Honest About Advertising in This Hilarious Speech at the Clios | Adweek...
Forum: Copywriting 28th September 2014, 12:02 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,651
Posted By The Copy Nazi
Re: I wrote 3 headlines for a WordPress plugin. Need your expert opinion.

Not really. I would contend it's obvious the head is referring to the daily views of Google Images - not some schmuck's blog. In fact it would be way more than 1 Billion page views a day. BBC News -...
Forum: Copywriting 18th September 2014, 04:30 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,365
Posted By Andrew Gould
Re: Please Critique My "Warriors For Hire" Ad

All about you.



Meh.



All about you.
Forum: Copywriting 10th September 2014, 06:07 AM
Replies: 46
Views: 1,277
Posted By JohnRussell
Re: My Reputation Is More Important Than Hype - Can You Help?

Fair enough...

I really don't know anything about gambling so maybe I was oversimplifying it.

Maybe the OP can segment his market like that:

If you'll have patience, if you'll do exactly...
Forum: Copywriting 27th August 2014, 03:29 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 2,074
Posted By ThePromotionalGuy
Re: The Lazy Man's Way To Riches worth it?

Holy Search Engines Tim,

You mean if I type in specific words into a search engine's box it will give me results?

Wow, I had no idea. :cool:

UPDATE: Tim. I don't believe in search engine...
Forum: Copywriting 26th August 2014, 08:07 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 492
Posted By angiecolee
Re: suggestions, thoughts

Look man, I get that this is a place for advice and talking about copy.

We're not here to help you write/advise you on the best way to complete every single assignment. You want that? Hire a...
Forum: Copywriting 21st August 2014, 08:18 AM
Replies: 24
Views: 1,125
Posted By Chriswrighto
Re: Some Copywriting Issues on my squeeze page

David, I think you need to address this...

I've taken a look as well and you've taken their book and removed their link. Not cool.

And you've posted this on a public forum too?

Michael...
Forum: Copywriting 8th August 2014, 12:19 AM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,616
Posted By joe golfer
Re: Why We're Not Entering a Dark Age Of Copywriting

There is plenty of work at the low end, middle, and high end. Some cats just want to stay at the low end. Maybe they have a great upsell strategy, I don't know. But there is a ton of work for them....
Forum: Copywriting 7th August 2014, 02:02 PM
Replies: 43
Views: 1,616
Posted By Sajun Becker
Why We're Not Entering a Dark Age Of Copywriting

Lately there's been a fringe sentiment of doom and gloom about the state of the copywriting industry.

I've heard things like "Copywriting work is being outsourced to graphic designers", or "The...
Forum: Copywriting 25th July 2014, 10:52 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 583
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Your new uniform?

So ah... what do YOU think of this shirt?

Personally, I think... it just makes sense.

;-)
Forum: Copywriting 23rd July 2014, 02:11 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 892
Posted By sethczerepak
Re: Is this good sales copy or just a well written article?

That last sentence, I assure you, is a mistake that makes most IMers hit a glass ceiling in their first few years.

Great relationships with past customers will explode your biz. Trying to pump...
Forum: Copywriting 21st July 2014, 06:13 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 926
Posted By JohnRussell
Re: I'm not here to chew the fat on being fat....

Joseph...throughout this letter you are trying to be clever. You'll lose a lot of people.

Copywriting is not about being clever - it's about being clear, concise and compelling.

You're a good...
Forum: Copywriting 13th July 2014, 01:44 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,760
Posted By marciayudkin
Re: "Guarantees" and "offers" in selling copywriting services?

That is not what most people consider to be a guarantee - it's a contingent fee and from what I have heard, lawyers are allowed to offer that only in certain kinds of cases, not across the board. ...
Forum: Copywriting 12th July 2014, 03:36 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,683
Posted By Chriswrighto
Re: Best sales pages or videos out right now...

The solution for a newbie struggling with where to start is to learn the basics of copywriting.

Even just reading "The Ultimate Sales Letter" will give the person the ability to take a look at...
Forum: Copywriting 12th July 2014, 02:15 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,683
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Best sales pages or videos out right now...

There are great sales lessons everywhere you look. There are even great sales lessons in promotions that fail spectacularly.

Of course it's always wise to include the great works in your studies....
Forum: Copywriting 10th July 2014, 11:40 AM
Replies: 29
Views: 2,144
Posted By BrianMcLeod
Re: Can A Non-Sleazy Dating Sales Page Work? Critiques Please!

When it comes to critiques, bad advice with good intentions is ultimately destructive, not constructive. When you give advice based not on experience, but your own projected values, you're not...
Forum: Copywriting 9th July 2014, 09:53 AM
Replies: 29
Views: 2,144
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Can A Non-Sleazy Dating Sales Page Work? Critiques Please!

You missed the point. The point was language.

Would you use the word "optimize" when casually talking to a friend about dating? I'd hope not. I'm surrounded by word nerds and English majors on a...
Forum: Copywriting 2nd July 2014, 12:06 PM
Replies: 65
Views: 3,848
Posted By angiecolee
Re: My Thoughts On Copywriting After 11 Years

Nobody here was putting you down. They actually are being quite helpful, but they're not mincing words to save ego.

There's a difference between insulting and someone saying something you don't...
Forum: Copywriting 17th June 2014, 01:52 PM
Replies: 31
Views: 4,025
Posted By angiecolee
Re: New to copywriting

It can be and it can't be. There are overlapping shades, as there are in most industries with specialization.

A Tesla mechanic is not a diesel mechanic. But they both work with cars.

An...
Forum: Copywriting 15th June 2014, 09:24 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,926
Posted By Chriswrighto
Re: To all you so-called "Copywriters" in here...

It's being related to a headlines in sales letters (considering that's what the original post is about.)

To say that 'relating your headline to the body' is junk is poor judgement, especially from...
Forum: Copywriting 13th June 2014, 10:36 AM
Replies: 25
Views: 1,595
Posted By Cool Hand Luke
Re: Should the Copywriting and CRO forums be merged?

http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m2ohxkoqD31qk88o4.gif
Forum: Copywriting 11th June 2014, 11:56 AM
Replies: 42
Views: 1,422
Posted By angiecolee
Re: Which is better? Please help solve an argument!

First one, definitely.

You need to study the market a little more. I know a lot of menopausal women were born in the 60s, but how often do you really think they say Vagina in daily conversation? ...
Forum: Copywriting 10th June 2014, 11:30 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 605
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: Help with promoting my services

A successful copy?

No. Ready you're not.



You think? Maybe? Okay, I'm being facetious. My apologies. But you're NOWHERE near ready to "deliver a persuasive pitch."
Forum: Copywriting 10th June 2014, 11:28 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,244
Posted By Raydal
Re: What do you guys think of this ClickBank salespage

What gives this letter real credibility is placed way to far down the page--the
FOX news video. I think placing this at the top would make all the difference
for this letter.

And it's strange...
Forum: Copywriting 8th May 2014, 08:53 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 1,321
Posted By jjosephs
Re: Critique my sales email please

Steve, with all due respect, it's a sinker. It reeks from the bottom up with the sterilized corporate feel that creates distance and distrust. Sales needs to eliminate distance.

If this was the...
Forum: Copywriting 25th March 2014, 11:21 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 1,377
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: Salespage critique request

I've never understood why the original Buddha was so idolized.

Here's a guy who left his wife and baby to go sit under a tree, because he couldn't deal with REAL life.

And that's exactly what...
Forum: Copywriting 25th March 2014, 10:19 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 1,377
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: Salespage critique request

That's WHY this could end up being good positioning - with the right traffic.

So many people are fed up with spiritual politics. It's such a facade; a pageant. Everyone's so "la-di-da."

This...
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